literature

Dragon Rage: The First War prologue

Deviation Actions

SilverBeastLaguz's avatar
Published:
2.5K Views

Literature Text

Today once flourishing towns and cities now lay in ruins. What could cause the ultimate downfall of the human race you may ask? A horde of dragons angered by years of abuse, slavery, and murder at the hands of their oppressors. This all happened in a world much like our own; a planet called Veleia. As similar as this world seemed to our own there was one big difference. This difference was that dragons were once kind and wise creatures, but now mean and merciless monsters. (For the most part that is.)

The dragons were strong noble creatures; they had the ability to breathe fire and had armor as hard as rocks in the form of scales covering their hides. Back then in the medieval period, they were few in numbers and their existence was unheard of by the humans. Until one day mysterious events have been happening. Farms were getting raided of livestock, some of which were eaten on the ground; precious jewelry was stolen; mines were raided of its gems and rich metallic ores; and earthquakes, forest fires, and weather changes were becoming more common. At first the humans thought it was the work of an evil sorcerer, until one man discovered the dragons and told the others about it.
The humans came over and saw these creatures for themselves. Wanting to use the creatures’ powers to make the humans’ work and chores easier to benefit the economy efficiently, the humans instantly started attacking the dragons, enslaving the ones they catch as pets and slaves, and using the dragons they killed for their scales. The dragons fought back valiantly, but humans won not by force, but by sheer numbers alone. 

For a very long time after the downfall of the free dragons the dragons were used as slaves for moving heavy objects, encouraged to work by sharp metal pokers, with a very high voltage of electricity running through it. They are also kept as pets by rich families kept in heavy duty reinforced electrified cages. The dragons had no hope for an easy escape. The dragons were often starved or fed rancid, stale food in small amounts to keep them weak.

As the dragons suffered they kept in contact through telepathic communication. The humans had no idea they were capable of communicating so they couldn't stop them. As the year went by the dragons were slowly biding their time waiting for their powers to return and the perfect moment to strike. Together they devised a flawless spell to aid their escape, and seek their revenge on the humans.

Nearly one-thousand years after the downfall of the free dragons they had perfected the spell. At that very moment, the humans were struggling to rebuild their towns; several natural disasters had weakened the humans. They were low on natural resources and other important items. The dragons took this opportunity to strike; they released their spell, rendering all human-made offensive technology useless. Electrical objects stopped working and locking mechanisms fell to pieces. The once strong, sturdy bars on the dragon cages became weak and rusted. The dragons broke free and attacked the humans starting the war between humans and dragons. 

The humans started to revert back to their old technology such as bow n' arrows and swords. Also unbelievably the government has abandoned us too, so don't expect any help from the military. A few select humans who only showed the dragons kindness, and tried to help them are greatly known by most dragons, news travels fast when you can speak telepathically to one another, and they stand a better chance of survival and even a chance of being protected by some dragons. Another thing different from this world and our own world is, it is much bigger, and has much more land covered by forest. As the dragons began their attack, the humans abandoned their towns and cities, to go hide in the forest. There they built camps, trying to build an army to defeat these 'horrible monsters'.

Giftstories before the start of the main story:
Firefly13's giftstory 1 - fav.me/dbx0qby

This is another fanfic based on an RP, which is at Dragon Cave's forums. This story will be told from the perspective of my characters such as Atlas, Aeolus, and Kathia. And yes, I copied the intro from the RP. This is so that newcomers can know what this fanfic is all about in case the RP dies.

You can see the RP at this following link: forums.dragcave.net/index.php?…

EDIT: So after finding out that the dragons were captured and defeated during the medieval period in WWotS's edition, I decided to redo the prologue again. I decided to make it much closer to its original format, since I need to keep true to the RP. As for the not all humans are bad, we could say that the Dragon Rights organizations were progressively getting power during the modern era, but not strong enough to overturn slavery.

Great War: Dragons vs Humans (c) :iconpicknick10:
Story written by me
Dragon Cave (c) TJ09 (a.k.a. T.J. Lipscomb)

List of chapters
Prologue - Here!
Chapter 1 - fav.me/d6l5ll5
Chapter 2 - fav.me/d6od54z
Chapter 3 - fav.me/d6tnjom
Chapter 4 - fav.me/d6uh8tk
Chapter 5 - fav.me/d6yfcwc
Chapter 6 - fav.me/d6yhcc8
Chapter 7 - fav.me/d6ysvp9
Chapter 8 - fav.me/d70nj7n
Chapter 9 - fav.me/d7dtv2m
Chapter 10 - fav.me/d7gg0ar
Chapter 11 - fav.me/d7kh7qy
Chapter 12 - fav.me/d7nrr5f
Chapter 13 - fav.me/d7ooa04
Chapter 14 - fav.me/d7vldhk
Chapter 15 - fav.me/d7unjyi
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 16
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 17
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 18
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 19
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 20
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 21
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 22
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 23
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 24
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 25
Dragon Rage: The First War chp. 26
Chapter 51 - fav.me/dat4jjt

Table of Giftstories - fav.me/dbog1ea
© 2013 - 2024 SilverBeastLaguz
Comments3
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
AtlantaTheAristocrat's avatar
:star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

This is my first critique, I have no experience so please bear with me.

The prologue is good, but there are some problems with it. After "...attacking the dragons..." there should be a coma, semi colon or a period. While you were trying not to reveal too much of the world for the sake of the plot, the prologue felt too short and felt that there was something missing that need to make it stand out.
Translating an RP to a readable story needs more time to add in things and to show the reader the state of this world you are presenting.
As for the story itself, it seems too misanthropic to me by which I mean that the humans are represented as uncaring, cruel bastards with no regards for another sentient species. I think that the prologue needs to explain the relationship and history between dragons and humans much more thoroughly to show that there must have been a sort of misunderstanding between humanity and dragon kind.
I like the dragon caused apocalypse idea though, it is an original idea that can be tweaked to make it stand out more. The problem with this is that is reads all too similar to the 'humans caused their own demise, sentient animals take over and try to survive against the remaining humans that still hunt them' stories. Let's also take into consideration that this story has a combination of magic and modern technology. That I rarely see on dA.

In all, this is a good story that needs more tweaking and to show the shades of gray of morality between humanity and the dragons.